The author of “Happiness Revised,” Mihaly Csikszentmihalyi, writes about his research on human happiness. His essay is precise and provides numerous examples of his research. According to the rubric, Csikszentmihalyi achieves 275 points. The reason the author is given this total is because he provides the necessary content in his essay, but lacks in certain aspects. The author's introduction starts off with an example of how Aristotle and the Greeks perceive happiness. The introduction his seven sentences long. The thesis is not directed but implied throughout the essay; that our life experiences add up to our happiness. The hook was not as strong, and therefore lost ten points, due to the fact that the essay started off with an uninteresting …show more content…
The overall introduction was correct in the sense of stating the general idea of the purpose and its goals. Numerous supporting sentences go into the body paragraphs using examples and evidence to support the purpose. According to the rubric rhetorical appeals need to make an appearance in the body paragraphs. Rhetorical appeals have three key parts: logos, ethos, pathos. Logos is easily recognizable in the essay through the advantages-disadvantages pattern. This pattern is shown in each paragraph, for example, the second paragraph is describing the advantages of happiness whereas the fourth paragraph is telling about the disadvantages of happiness. The body paragraphs also make several declarations that can be shown in the fourth paragraph's topic sentence, “happiness is not something that happens,” Csikszentmihalyi supports this statement by giving the definition of happiness and examples. Ethos is recognizable when the author mentions his own research in paragraph six trying to establish his credibility. Pathos is not very recognizable because each paragraph is constructed in a similar plain way, losing five points. The paragraph that provides