One could argue many points for ,and against the legalization of marijuana. While one could make a good argument for ,and against the legalization of this drug Lynn Streeter attempted to do just that in her essay “Legalize It”. While her argument had a good foundation it was lacking in many ways. She lacked supporting evidence in what she had written, ad did not share many of her sources. She had to many different subject in he argument.
She failed to explain many of her statements. Her essay was week ,and not very well written. When she was arguing that it was not harmful, the article she was arguing she cited it ,but did not include why she felt that way.
While she was arguing the inaccuracy of the study George Bierson’s news article
…show more content…
If anybody is still compelled to buy into the "gateway" theory, a real-life example is available for all to see: In Holland, marijuana has been partially decriminalized since the 1970's.” it had to many different things going on in theses sentences, before she had written this, she had written about those statistics I had mentioned in the previous paragraphs. She had also talked about Bierson’s article. Within one paragraph she had three different subjects. Everything was so mixed up that it lacked any organization ,and completely lacked clarity. The way she could have made it a more cohesive paper would be argue why the government should legalize Marijuana, Explain why the study in Bierson’s article was not accurate ,would of included some of the positive aspects of legalizing Marijuana for example
maybe by saying government would gain more revenue from legalizing it. But she just made to many generalizations without supporting what she had written.
In concluding my essay there were just too many mistakes to mention all of them. But focused on the bigger issues of what she was lacking to make her argument stronger. She failed to provide evidence for her argument, and did not give details on her statement ,and made many generalizations. Making her argument week ,and leaving it open for others to refute what she had written. She had strong argument with poor execution of the argument. She did not keep with one topic ,she had too many different thoughts going on each paragraph did not have one specific