Within the first paragraph there isn’t a clear thesis, it is displaying opinionated questions instead of proven facts. There are too many rhetorical questions throughout the paper. It would be better if the author narrowed down the idea of gun control to one topic for example there position on gun control and then find sources that agree. That way there is a definite topic not just the arguments from each side of gun control. Since the topic is so controversial the author has to decide which way to go. The thesis should set up the paper and each paragraph should reflect back to the thesis. For example the author’s main idea was how there are positive and negatives to the use of guns and how the gun control in government doesn’t satisfy