The So What Analysis

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In this essay, I admire how the writer starts her introduction sentence with an observation on her subject. The writer’s thesis is wordy but strong, and outlines the rest of the essay. Instead of using an entire quote, the writer paraphrased or used two or three important words from the quote to support her idea. The writer also analyzed the author’s ideas instead of stating exactly what the author wrote. The writer did however, use one to two long quotes that she could have shortened or paraphrased. After each quote, the writer did an excellent job on explaining how the quote relates to the author’s idea, and then adds her own comment after the explanation.
The writer could also improve her conclusion. The So What? sentence can be fixed by