Things Fall Apart

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In the essay I created about Umuofia having both civilized and uncivilized attributes, my strength, includes a complex thesis, and my weakness, includes use of passive voice, illustrated my various developments in essay writing. The strength that I exhibited in my essay was a complex thesis. The improvement in my theses can be seen in my most recent thesis from the essay about Umuofia. The thesis was filled with rich vocabulary and strong language in order to convey my opinion with correct examples. This differs greatly from some of my first theses of the year, which lacked strong vocab, and were weaker than they are now. The theses from the beginning, were not well developed, and had shaky reasoning. The thesis from the essay about Things Fall Apart has a stronger and more assertive voice for stating my opinions in the essay, and also reflects a deeper …show more content…

In contrast, a weakness that I exhibited was the use of passive voice. Throughout my essay, “be verbs” and other aspects of passive voice were seen. I consistently used “be verbs” like is, was, were,etc. seen in the following, “One prominent uncivilized quality seen in the society is the brutal war traditions. “. I have gotten better at using less passive voice, but there is still a large amount of passive voice in my essay. The biggest example of passive voice is the use of “be verbs”, as previously stated, which are difficult not to use for me. Overall my strength of creating developed thesis, and my weakness of passive voice help illustrate how my writing style has