It is very enjoyable to read first person present as the POV, the story will move right along with this POV. Sometimes too fast. When the story switches to past, it takes the reader out of the moment. However, the pace of the story is fast and easy to read. The setting in the woods, we don't know where. It is very believable. The characters are very believable, and I suspect you are setting up a conflict between Wim and Is. Wim will try to take over the troop and Is won't want him to. It is her troop after all, and he has stated that he has a history to do this. Good Plot, and it feels clear at this point in your novel. The conflict in this part is entirely, internal; which is fine, it is the introductory chapter. The Plague is enough of a set-up for external conflict in the future. The tension is at a good level this early in the story. …show more content…
The sun is now in its full brightness and the near emptiness of the trees around this camp offer little protection from its glorious light. Most of the troop are awake, except for Orly. How she can sleep with the sun beaming in her eyes, I'll never understand. Nice introduction; the story introduces new characters at a good pace. My instincts about Wim’s hunting skills seem to be correct. They returned with nine squirrels and a rabbit. Thom mentioned spotting deer tracks but who knows if we'll be around long enough to find it. Lide and her helpers begin to prepare the food as much as they can. It dawns on me how eerily quiet the camp is today and I realize I forgot to make an introduction. "Trackers!" I raise my voice, loud enough for everyone to hear but not for anyone else outside to know our location and stand on the log I had been sitting on around the fire. I have their full attention now except Wim, who continues working on a squirrel. "Good morning, everyone. I just thought I'd introduce our breakfast guest. This is Wim." I gesture in his direction. Now, I have his