Creative Writing: Fort Red

Lydia and her team are assigned to capture and hold fort RED. Her squadron is slowly sneaking up on fort RED. They consist of Grant Doolittle,Bobby Joe, and Jimmy Jack. Lydia, whose age is only 20, is older than the whole squadron.
Lydia is commanding her squadron. “The mission is to capture fort RED. Team, I want you guys to sneak up through the forest I will be right behind you.”
“Bobby, you and Jimmy will be following me up to fort RED, be really sneaky,” whispers Grant. The four of them slowly sneak up on fort RED.
Lydia commands Bobby Joe to protect her, but Grant and Jimmy think the enemy will see them because Bobby’s hair is as bright as the sun during winter, even though Bobby is short of short. Lydia waits until Grant and Jimmy are gone then she sneaks up to Bobby and slits his throat. Next, she hides the body in a bush full of thorns. As Bobby 's body lies there, the blood is dripping out of his throat slowly, trickling down his camouflage shirt that he really loved, the blood making a nasty brown color.

Grant asked, “ where 's Bobby?”
Lydia replied,“he got shot by a german, and died.” Grant, Jimmy,and Lydia keep moving along. The three of them kept walking down the corridors, and it is really dead. Jimmy looks towards the general and sees dried blood on the blade. Then Jimmy figures out what really happened to Bobby.
Jimmy says to the commander, “come over here to check the room.”
Lydia walks into the room and Jimmy locks the door, and points a gun up to Lydia’s head.
Lydia replies,“ what the heck are you doing.”
Jimmy answers, “ I know what you did to Bobby!”
“Did what?” Lydia