Eight Immortals Of Revenants

REVENANTS is a proposed, new one-hour supernatural, dramatic TV series. The series presents like a detective series, in which each week the protagonist will investigate new cases. While these cases are closed ended, the series also appears to have continuing storyline format.

While private eye/detective series are not new to the industry, this series may stand out given the hook that the central anti-hero, Lucas is immortal. It’s a new twist for a tried and true formula.

In the treatment outline, the concept section, however, is a bit too vague to get a clear picture of the series. Avoid being vague or mysterious. Give a straightforward summary of the logline and concept.

As presented, it appears that Lucas died and became immortal. In

It’s extremely pivotal for the audience/producer/agent to understand this concept. The words “visible ghost” etc. are also extremely appealing.

In addition, explain the concept of The Eight Immortals of Taoism. If they have powers, clearly showcase this. If Lucas has any special powers, clearly showcase this too. These are very appealing and pivotal features for the series, but not well highlighted in the outline treatment.

State what the format or formula of the series will look like. State that each week Lucas will investigate a new case while balancing his personal life, and that throughout the series he’s pursued by the relentless Triad. It may benefit the series to actually identify by name the fiercest antagonist.

The idea that Lucas will investigate different cases each week certainly has merit, but the bar has been raised in these types of shows and it would benefit the script to clearly create an on-going personal storyline that is developed throughout the series. For example, if someone close to Lucas goes missing, he’s on a quest to find him or her, as he investigates other cases. Or perhaps he’s investigating a murder, that’s on going. The series TWIN PEAKS did a nice job of investigating the death of Laura Palmer and it was this main case that drove the

This should include: identifying their external goal, inner struggle, and interpersonal conflict. Identify their role and function for the series. The roles of the characters need to attract actors. Make sure to show their depth, as characters. Highlight the hero vs. foe conflict for the show. Right now, the treatment doesn’t go into enough depth regarding the characters. The audience doesn’t understand the relationship between characters, like Lucas and his son; Lucas and his girlfriend; and Lucas and his adversaries. Make sure Lucas is defined as a very active hero.

In the marketability section, it’s good to identify the demographics and to highlight successful series. The X-Files is a series one might include to show it’s long-running success and the potential of this series.

The future episodes tend to have a repeated theme about missing people: In The Ten Commandments: the wife is missing; In Through the Looking Glass, the husband is missing (it’s nice how Jason is used in this episode); in White is Black and Black is White, four sons are missing; and In The Carrier, several children are missing. This does make the series feel repetitive. If Lucas were an investigator, who tracks down missing people than clarify this and the first show would have to involve someone