Outline
Introductory paragraph - Basic information and thesis
-Author, title of work, etc.
-thesis: what article is about, view on topic
Body Paragraph 1: Pathos
Main idea- Mackay does an extraordinary job using pathos in this essay.
Examples and Explanations-
-Mackay talks about how hard it is for the patients to be on dialysis.
-She tells how people in third world countries are willing to give away kidneys because of the harsh conditions they live in and the debt they have accumulated
-Mackay also talks about how organ sellers suffer from low pay
-She also explains why surgeons involved in illegal operations can suffer as well. Evidence-
(Page 1 Para 3). "Dialysis is harsh, expensive, and, worst of all, only temporary."
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"In third world countries, there are people willing to do anything for money. In such extreme poverty these people barely have enough to eat, living in shacks and sleeping on dirt floors.
(Page 4 Para 3). "A study in India discovered that in the long run, organ sellers suffer. In the illegal kidney trade, nobody has the sellers interests at heart. After selling a kidney, their state of living actually worsens. While the $1,000 pays off one debt, it is not enough to relieve the donor of the extreme poverty that placed him in debt in the first
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Examples and explanations-
She cites an article from The Lancet explaining that even though donating a kidney is a risk, tons of people do risky things all of the time, from jobs to just pure pleasure. It does not make sense for the government to ban something that is a risk because they need to do it to sustain life.
She also cites an article from Michael Finkel, of the New York Times. This article states that the money people who are diagnosed with end stage renal disease spend on dialysis would cover the expense of the transplant, and reward the donor with as much as $25,000.
Mackay mentions the work of Madhav Goyal, who wrote an entry in the Journal of the American Medical Association. This work explains that the donor is the worst one treated in the process of the kidney transplant operation. They are extremely underpaid and their state of living can actually worsen after giving their kidney.
Evidence-
(Page 3 Para 3). "As explained in The Lancet, "If the rich are free to engage in dangerous sports for pleasure, or dangerous jobs for high pay, it is difficult to see why the poor who take the lesser risk of kidney selling for greater rewards . . . should be thought so misguided as to need saving from themselves." (Radcliffe- Richards et al.