Textual Analysis Of Pay And Play

This script features an intriguing world involving the champagne industry. It’s an interesting inside look at how this world works. The script also offers a strong, female protagonist that drives the story. She’s well established as an ambitious woman, who goes after what she wants, regardless of the professional and personal cost to her and others. The goal is clear and the stakes become high.

While there are definite strengths to the presentation, the script would benefit from more development. There are several areas worth discussing.

One of the first elements to explore is the true story genre and tone. This feels ambiguous because the tone changes throughout the script. In fact, in the opening one thinks this might be a comedy. It opens

However, as the script continues it begins to feel more like a drama and character study of Sam as she gets over her head and lives beyond her means. She turns to the amoral and illegal activities of “pay and play.” It’s actually intriguing to watch her manipulate her clients, only to see it all fall apart.

The concern is that later, the script turns into a violent, criminal thriller, when Sam is “fondled” (which feels exploitive and out of place with the prior tone) and the story turns darker when she goes undercover. The abduction, beating, and then murder of Jess make the story feel more like a thriller. Thus, the tone doesn’t match from the opening and the pitch feels inconsistent; they don’t blend well together. Select which story type is being told and structure the plot and tone around that story

She’s clearly spirited and independent. She’s driven by her ambitious and she’s controlling, bossy, and rude. The problem with Sam is that she’s never likable. A character can be flawed, rude, and selfish, but they also have to be more emotionally relatable. The audience has to have a rooting interest in the character, in her problem, and they have to want her to achieve her goal.

Given the current presentation of Sam, it’s very challenging to feel for her or her situation. As late as page 85, when she rages at Jess, Sam shows very little sign of any type of character arc, insight, or growth. In fact, she never really does show any real transformation. She agrees to work with Damon only to save herself and perhaps her father, but she still feels selfish and unaware of her flaws.

Ironically, when Jess is killed, she doesn’t really have any genuine emotion. It is noted that at the wedding she admits she would like to think about having a family and getting married, but then she reverts back to her old self.

Also, it would benefit the script to explore her inner conflict and struggle. Examine why Sam has a need to be so successful and why she’s so ambitious. Find ways to make her more