I referred to unit 7’s discussion post where you outlined your essay. So far your research has proven to make for an interesting essay. I’m sorry I did not find a persuasive thesis statement in Unit 8 though, meaning I’m not convinced that there should be a policy change. I know you stated this is a working thesis statement which was not included in unit 8’s post. If you don’t mind, I would like to give some guidance.
The Satires of WWII The main reference to satire in the book Slaughterhouse-five by Kurt Vonnegut is the life at war. It is mentioned in his book that many of the men sent to war are just babies, and are not ready for the front lines of battle. Also, another direct reference of satire is the advancements in modern warfare. The book takes place in Dresden during WWII.
I did not fully understand how to write conclusions with fluency until junior year. To this day, I still have issues with producing effective conclusions for any piece of writing that I need to
I have revised my thesis statement to two sentences, rather than one. This is so that my point can be understood in a more effective way. My thesis statement is as follows. “There should be more stringent screening processes for individuals wanting to own guns in the United States because the current laws and regulations do not require mental health background checks and evaluations. Too many people with mental health issues are slipping through the cracks and obtaining weapons and then using them on innocent people.”
As an English as a second language speaker, writing is very challenging for me. I feel like I had two brains which are communicating together at the same time. As I mentioned before I do have a hesitation about telling a story in English. This left me feeling frustrated, scared, angry, and ashamed. Even I progress on speaking after taking accent reduction class.
The Smarthinking program offers assistance in areas that majority of adult students may struggle in such as creating a essay. Since I’ve been out of school for almost 20 years I’ve struggled with creating a successful essay. I didn’t understand why we needed to prepare to tell a story. However I learned that college was much more then just writing or telling a story. It requires you to have organization starting with a topic introduction, thesis statement, main ideas and closing statement so that your audience can have a clear understanding of the message your giving.
In Voltaire’s Candide, surprise is in the first paragraph of Chapter 6 when the scholars of the University of Coimbra have concluded that earthquakes are preventable. Their recipe for success is slowly burning a few people. Dr. Pangloss and Candide are surely “The Devils” who have caused the earthquake. Candide is flogged to a rhythmic chant, while Dr. Pangloss is hung. These two were not burned for causing the earthquake, but two Biscayan men were.
My goal is to improve writing at the English college level, so that I am able to communicate and write papers clearly for the college class 's requirement and for my future career. Writing is difficult for me because I am a deaf student at the TNCC College. ASL is different from English because it does not include articles, and words such as “is” and “be.” When I write, I have to learn to include all the words that I do not normally use in my native language. This makes it more challenging for me to express myself when writing a paper because the two languages do not match.
This past year in English has been rewarding and self-fulfilling. I entered the year as a new and improved Poppers in writing essays. A glance at my first paper- an essay on Ender's Game- and my last one in 9th grade, the This I Believe essay, is a great example of the incredible differences in my writing which quickly improved as a freshman. However, entering sophomore year I was struck with the false belief that I was done learning about how to write and that from then on would just be about gaining more experience. How wrong I was.
I feel that my sentence structure has improved but, what I still identify as a weakness is that I tend to drift from topic when writing and making sure I don’t summarize what I had previously written in the conclusion. What I have learned so far in the study of literature is that when it comes to poetry you need take the poem line by line sometimes to understand it. My favorite piece of literature so far has been reading Hamlet by William Shakespeare because I enjoyed reading plays when I was in English such as Romeo and Juliet and A Streetcar Named Desire. My least favorite was some of the poetry because I had always had difficulty in breaking down the poem and understanding what it was about. I don’t think I have learned anything new about myself as a result of this course except it reminded me why I enjoyed reading
I tend to get off topic sometimes which is really bad when writing stories. Another weakness of mine would be formatting. Certain forms of writing should have a specific type of format. Also feeling like a failure is a weakness, it discourages me sometimes and my writing may get affected. I’ve acquired a lot of new skills during this
There was always some short lectures which helped me write the paper better. Those small things from those lectures helped me with the assignment. If I were to say my weakest paper was the first short story analysis paper because it was all over places. No topic sentences was present in paragraphs.
Position statement: For college Should I or should I not, that is the decision we all encounter when we finally reach high school. Now, there are many factors that will affect a person’s life. The most important of these factors is whether or not one has a college degree. Through out this essay I will discuss why I believe that it would be advantageous for students to continue their education in college. I believe this because the unemployment rate (proven by FRED) among high school graduates is incredibly much higher than people that have graduated from college.
Another weakness is Grammar mistakes, like using farther instead of further. They way i can improve upon these weaknesses is practicing verb editing, knowing where to put commas, periods and apostrophes. Another way i can improve on these mistakes is limiting and cutting ideas that are not needed, and seeing what best fits in my paper. My end of semester writing is way different then my writing from earlier in the semester. A paper i did from earlier in the semester ‘’Book 's/Knowledge Fahrenheit 451’’i lacked main focus, poor connections, too many idea’s, organization and some grammar.
One out of the three weaknesses is organizing ideas. Whenever I am caught up in the moment, I tend to lose track of organization in Writing. The second weakness is not being specific about my topic enough for the readers to understand what my paper is mostly about. My third and final weakness in English is punctuation. Every time I type or write, I tend to miss out most of the punctuation in my paper.
