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Under The Persimmon Analysis

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Feedback from previous essays: “You could transition a bit more between examples, but these are refinements.“ Goal: My goal is to have a well organized essay that has every single sentence prove the thesis statement. Prompt: Life in constant conflict has major impacts on the people who experience it. Each MIP should focus on a key WAR event (a battle / encounter with military, a death caused by war, etc) that CHANGES the character, or a type of impact (emotional scarring (like loss of loved ones), loss of opportunities, physical trauma, loss of homes & stability, etc.) – evidence should cover multiple people: Najmah, Nusrat, and/or many background characters… the goal is to Frame your paper around a statement that identifies how war affects …show more content…

Suggested TS format: “While life in constant conflict can be very traumatic, Suzanne Fisher Staples shows that people can emerge stronger/ with a better understanding of themselves and what they value” (AGG) Look at the fierce eyes that have seen their own wounds heal. (BS-1) First, characters in Under the Persimmon Tree go through misfortune events due to the impacts of war. (BS-2) Next, the violence associated with war causes multiple characters to react emotionally. (BS-3) Although the characters throughout the book are facing struggles of war, they become stronger people through the hardships of war. (TS) The conflict of war in Under the Persimmon Tree shapes the lives of those who experience it. (MIP-1) People suffer with great losses from the effects of war. (SIP A) War has caused people to lose amenities and basic necessities that are needed for survival. (STEWE-1) When Najmah is at the refugee camp at Torkhum with Akhtar and Khalida, she is forced to make new changes …show more content…

(BS-3) War causes people to evolve into a stronger person. (BS-2) Also a character’s individuality changes throughout the challenges of war .(BS-1)Finally, people suffer with losses from the effects of war. (R.) Look past their eyes, observe the pain and the suffering they went through. Work Cited Staples, Suzanne Fisher. Under the Persimmon Tree. New York, Square Fish, 2005. Essay Final Checklist: Please insert a page break at the bottom of your essay and paste this checklist beneath it. Make sure that you have completed each of these items - “X” them off as you go. Be sure to review the Annotated Sample Essay Done Check Item Scoring: Reviewed instructions and the rubric so that you are clear on what is being assessed ! Here’s a free tool, where you can paste your essay and get feedback on grammar, mechanics, vocabulary and structure -- give it a look! Paper Grader ! Content: TS answers the

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