Definition Essay Examples

With the amount of time given to produce the first draft of the extended definition essay, I was able to write what I thought to be a strong piece. It was my personal goal to stump whoever would be providing notes for revision on my essay. This challenge had more to do with expanding my capabilities as a writer than I had originally thought. As stated previously, I had ample time to write before the first draft was due. I used this time to carefully proofread, edit, and revise on my own before sending in a first draft. Upon receiving the resulting comments from my Brainfuse tutor, Andy, I was surprised at how little he had suggested to change. In fact, he did well to boost my confidence as a writer by providing specific examples of

On my final revision, I made what I thought to be a crucial change to my thesis. For example, I had originally intended on covering the subject of disciplining misbehavior in the body of my essay. Instead, I wrote about the importance of parents to set a good example for their children. It would be confusing for the reader to never read about discipline if it was included in the thesis. Besides changing the thesis, I also added specific examples in areas that I might have been too broad. Instead of simply stating that parents might change their habits, for example, I gave a specific example of how parents might accomplish that task. I also was able to change word choice to more clearly define the ideas I was trying to portray to the reader. This often made me reevaluate what my specific goal for the sentence was. There were a few sentences that didn’t flow well together, so I was able to add transitional sentences to make them easier to understand. These evaluations strengthened the ideas that I wanted the reader to focus on as I myself discovered the specific purpose I chose for each sentence and