My descriptive setting was set in dystopia. A future no one would prefer to be in: the complete opposite of Utopia. One of the aspects I’m fond of with my descriptive piece is my title ‘Curfew’. I wanted my main focus to be isolation and darkness. The whole point of curfew is usually to get home before it gets dark and most teenagers have a curfew due to the fact that when it gets dark, it is not as safe. In my descriptive piece, my character stays out in the open streets until the sun starts to set and the night sky starts to spread. And once the character makes their way to the alley, it becomes so dark that they can barely tell when their eyes are closed while possibly being chased, giving the impression of being in an obviously unsafe environment in the dark, therefore connecting with my title. I made the title a bit of a ‘show-it-don’t-tell-it’ type where it is actually much deeper than it lets on.
The darkness links with my idea of contrast in the first paragraph, “The earth that bares no life at all is dull under the few glares of the sun that tries to fight its way through the black barriers that doom our city.” The
…show more content…
I need to challenge myself a bit more with that and my punctuation. I used a brief amount of colons and semi-colons, but I could’ve gone more ‘out-of-the-box’ with the vocabulary. Also, in order to add more variety to my piece, I could’ve added some onomatopoeia. This would’ve gotten the reader even more into the writing. Words such as tapping and rapping could’ve been used to build up the tension felt by my protagonist. I tried to make my piece build up; in the beginning it was fairly relaxed yet still solemn. But as it went on, and the character saw the ‘human piece of metal’, the tension started to build slightly. I could’ve made the tension more sudden and quite impossible to ignore with more punctuation and also more interesting uses of