Please review your peer’s essay the way you want your own writing to be reviewed. Read the essay closely, and write your comments specifically in sentences. Mark any grammatical mistakes on the draft. Be sure to return the essay and this review form to the author. Submit the two peer review forms and two rough drafts when submitting the final draft (please refer to the essay prompt for more specific instructions on submission). 1. Does the essay have a clear, identifiable thesis? Does the thesis contain both a subject and an opinion about that subject? In your opinion, is the thesis either too broad or too narrow? Write the author’s thesis statement below. • Yes, it has a clear thesis and contains both subject and opinion. The thesis …show more content…
Does the author include a forecast in the introduction? Does the forecast use keywords or key phrases to provide an essay map for the reader? • Yes, author includes a forecast. And the forecast does have key phrases, but he should include more flow/be clearer. 3. What reasons does the author offer to support his or her thesis? Are the reasons supported with adequate and appropriate evidence? Do the body paragraphs fulfill the promise of the thesis statement, or is more support or better organization needed? Explain. • One reason the author gives is that government is free to do whatever they please with the information. Another reason is that that many are blind to see the dangers because of this. Yes the reasons are well supported as he used many evidence from Solove. Well supported but need to be more organized. 4. Does the essay make sense overall? Is the organization clear and effective? Does the author use topic sentences and transitions to create coherent connections between paragraphs? Is the author struggling with a particular aspect of grammar? • The essay does make sense overall. The organization should be clearer. And he should use more transitions as he uses a lot of and/buts. The author’s grammar is really