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Analyzing Kellogg's Advertising

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Aundrea Matchen, After reading your paper, I have come to find that you have a great argument/thesis. However, because you are arguing Kellogg’s changed their advertisement to fit consumer desire, I think it would be a great place to put a quote about the commodification of desire. Not only will this make your paper flow better, but it will support your argument also. Additionally, your work has some great observations in it, that I have highlighted pink. However, I think you will find that your paper would flow better and give the reader a better image if you added more detail. For example, in paragraph four it states, “In both ads the stand out color is red, to the borders around the children’s pictures, the woman’s t-shirt and even her
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