In the first paragraph there is no referencing to the fact there is an ad that the paper is based on. The second paragraph describes the ad, but does not give any reason for these descriptions. The argument for this paper is never clearly stated and must be inferred by the reader. As the paper progresses it starts to get off track and by page four the paper is no longer talking about the freedom and independence a child needs. Instead, it talks about asthma and the probability of males and females getting the disorder. In the last paragraph the author asks many rhetorical questions that take away from his original question, “How much independence and freedom is good for a child?” The paper tackles many different subjects when it never clearly