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Hi Jaqueline's Speech

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Hi Jaqueline, I really liked how you started your speech by defining poverty and saying that it is condition about choice and lack of freedom, that was a great way to hook your audience. As the speech went on, I had more questions and felt like pieces were missing. I would have liked to hear more about jane as well as other families and their lives. Something I think you should be conscience of is tone of voice and cadence. There was not a lot of fluctuation in your voice and the pace of your voice stayed the same. I think it would have made more of an impact if you would have slowed down you pace or pause at certain points. One example is when you mentioned that there were seven siblings, four slept on a twin bed and three slept on the floor,
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