The first piece of advice I received was content-related. I was advised to provide support for two statements I made within my paper, regarding the Catholic Church. I plan on improving my paper by finding a credible source to support my statement.
The second piece of advice I received was also content-related. My instructor suggested it would be best for me to take the rhetorical question I made in my paper and change it into a statement. After reading over the rhetorical question, I found it a bit overly worded and confusing. I am not completely sure how I plan on rewording the beginning of that sentence. I do, however, plan on changing the statement, “…but who is to say either side is wrong?” into, “no one can say either side is wrong.”
My instructor also made some format-related suggestions for me here and there. Many were simple spelling and
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However, one of my closing statements was not as well written as it could have been. The closing statement that could use some improvement is also the rhetorical question I was advised to correct by our instructor. Like I stated before, I plan on rephrasing it in order to make it into a statement and not a question. However, I must keep in mind that I do not need to rephrase it drastically differently. If I do, I may end up negatively impacting my sentence and making difficult for my readers to understand.
Lastly, my reviewer also commented on the formatting of my paper. They mentioned I correctly formatted the layout of my references page, along with the citations themselves. While writing my paper I was worried I had cited my sources incorrectly. Yet, my peer review along with my instructor review both had good notes on my APA formatting. I will keep in mind, when I include the new source in my paper, to not deviate from the resources I use to properly cite my paper’s