Alexys,
I love the topic you chose for your persuasive speech. It is evident in your tone that this is a subject that you care about.

1. Speech Introduction - The information you presented in your introduction was very informative. If I had to give a suggestion I would say to use the example of the 12 year old child coming into the office with her mom as the introduction. I was on the edge of my couch waiting to see what the parent had to say. Being the mother of a 5 year old, this is also a subject that is important to me. I have a 28 year old aslo, the laws were quite different when she was a minor. Even though the information in the beginning of your speech was more than enough to keep my attention, the example being told first would