Thank you for positing your outline for review! Strengths: You have an interesting topic here. Something that many of us would be interested reading more about. The way things are done in our public schools is very different from when we went to school. I look forward to reading your final draft. What Works? Why? 1. Introduction: Your introduction has a lot of information that get the reader curious of what is to come in the following paragraphs. The only thing is that you are not showing a clear vision of what is to come. I would suggest you think off all the areas of where public schools are failing our students. Once you have a list pick three issues that you feel will make the strongest case for your paper. That way you can base your introduction around that and give the read a good grasp on what they will be …show more content…
Supporting Evidence: You mentioned two different acts in your paper but you don’t elaborate on them. You should try going to why, these acts were created and what impacts if any they have created (if you want to use them in your paper). 4. Conclusion: Your conclusion is very short and should be your way of wrapping up your essay. This part is to bring all your supporting and rebuttal paragraphs to a close and reminding the reader of your thesis. Thesis: You have not created a thesis statement in your introduction. Your thesis statement is a sentence or two that tells reader your point of view and what three (or more) points you will be making to support your point of view. Structure: Based on the rubric you are missing a few items. Your paper needs to be 6-8 pages long. It also needs to be MLA or APA formatted. Great place to go to learn how to do APA or MLA formatting would be https://owl.english.purdue.edu/ . Once you create a thesis with at least three arguing points you will have to create a paragraph for each of those arguments. You will also have to create a paragraph of two with a rebuttal point so that you can use your sources to refute