Kukua Duodu
ENL 102
Professor Lori Beth De Hertogh
21 April 2016
Revision Memo
Since my last draft I have edited my research question. I decided to narrow my subject to focus on two types of communities and their creations. Changing my research question from all communities to online communities and communities based on powerful movements. I have added three more sources into my contribution essay. One is about a powerful movement and two about the effectiveness of online communities. For my primary research I added more information about how I conducted my interview. Why I decided an interview and what I learned form it. I added more of my personal beliefs in my essay alongside introducing my quotes.
Research Question: Are online communities
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Evan Beck, article “The Myth of the Gay Community” was shaped to achieve a powerful statement towards the gay community and Katharine Seelye, article “Tribute and Mourning Year After Boston Bombings”, was a tragic event that hit a community leading toward a powerful movement. Both authors are strong believers of the inclusion of the whole community; they establish effective arguments based on this simple belief. They both state that if an event or movement affects an entire community, all should be represented equally. To highlights how a sense of community it developed through this hardship, in the words of Governor Patrick Deval he states towards the mourning crowd “Don’t forget for a second that we will be there for you in a moment’s notice” (Seelye 3). Both support the notion that you should not portray the story from one angle, shadowing those really affected, talking passionately about team and …show more content…
For communities with similar purposes, facing similar struggles, and similar needs to lookout and aid one another. Building off the same framework as García and Sharif is Katherine Turcotte, author of “Helping the Adult Learner Succeed” whose powerful scholarly journal calls attention towards the hardships and barriers certain communities’ face. She primarily focuses in her journal on the injustice elder people face when they decided to return to college. Her claim throughout is that aspiring and growing communities need more help towards succeeding. All must benefit equally, regardless of their physical appearance and wealth, therefore, they all should get the same amount of resources to all achieve. Turcotte emphasizes heavily that though shared values invoke the time of a need towards the establishment of a community, many communities’ joint principles face unnecessary hardships. A community must focus to bring forth a troubling issue caused by injustice and racism. Because their shared values depend on recognition of these injustices. This article is an ideal example of how shared values within a community is continuously at a time of