In your argument calling for a stop to privatized space travel, you utilize a nice mix of statistical evidence and analysis. I particularly like how you integrate NASA’s shrinking budget to prove how the US has stopped supporting their space industry. However, throughout your essay you put forth many ideas without further developing them and/or linking them to your point. I can see where you're going with the argument concerning the US government’s lack of interest in the space program, but you fail to explicitly say that this has lead to greater privatization of the industry. You also say that their lack of funding has hindered scientific achievement, but you don't mention any specific examples, which really weakens your argument. I also