Hi Lana, You are correct, that is a very good thesis statement. The thesis is properly placed, and it contains three sub-topics. A well written thesis with three sub-topics are very important, it will act as a road map telling the audience what is to come. The thesis statement is perhaps the most crucial element of all in an essay.
Hello Lazarus: I think you have a pretty good and strong thesis. three reasons that are starting each one the three paragraphs of the body of your essay. Based on my essay feedback teacher said essay needs to be based on the ethos pathos and logos on the CDC website. Just make sure your following that path and review the teacher’s feedback on your first draft. Doing this will give you an idea if what you wrote is good or if something needs improvement.
As a reader one has to know what to look for and identify the main idea and understand what the author is trying to argue. Before taking Writing 10 I felt I was a good reader and able to identify the main idea in a prompt, but little did I really know. After going through the research process and trying to identify reliable sources I have essentially cut out the unnecessary information and I go straight to the idea or argument being made by the author. As of before, I would focus on every detail of the writing. Having been assigned readings and having discussions about the readings during class, I soon realized that writing is about an argument being made with supporting evidence.
Thesis Statement (Main Argument/Preview of Points): Outlines your argument/theme. Law should usually be followed, but there are certain circumstances such as if you love someone, a law crosses your morals and if the law is unfair or unequal. BODY PARAGRAPH #1: This first paragraph should focus on how conflicts support theme. I. Topic Sentence: States the literary element and introduces how it supports your theme.
SENTENCE OUTLINE Thesis Statement: A student who is considering attending West Career and Technical Academy needs to consider all of the advantages this school has to offer before determining whether or not to attend. The first thing the audience is going to see is a title slide that features an image of the school and the title of the presentation. A. The picture of the front of the building, of the West Tech, sign.
Part I: First of all, you will revise the provisional thesis statement that you generated in the previous unit Discussion. Make sure the thesis is concise (1–2 sentences) and includes two parts: a proposal for solving a problem and a reason that solution is needed. For more on creating effective persuasive thesis statements, review the following Writing Center resources: ● “Give Your Paper Direction: Developing a Strong Thesis Statement” ● “Writing a Thesis for a Persuasive Essay” Write your revised two-part thesis statement here, and be sure to include a claim + reason (the “because” or “since” clause): Academic success depends a lot on on how well students apply themselves, participate in activities and the help received. “In order
In conclusion, the most significant concept I want to improve is putting all my thoughts together and organized into a well written paper. I also commit to putting a larger effort into accepting my mistakes and fixing them. I know this class will prepare me for the future for the reason that my struggle with communicating in writing is not something I can avoid. It is a skill that I will need everyday, through college, through a career, and throughout my whole
reflecting on my progress thus far in this course, I have not only become cognizant of my writing skills and habits, but improvements I need to make to become a better writer. Although writing has never been one of my strong suits, I have learned valuable writing skills and strategies that are applicable to both the professional and academic field. Transitioning from the way I have been taught to write as a high school student has been the most challenging and influential change I have witnessed in my writing. To elaborate, in high school, we were taught the basis for writing any essay regardless of the audience or topic was the rigid five-paragraph essay structure.
Process Narrative What I intended for the essay to have on the reader is to inform and entertain the what is stated on the essay. I like to give the two sides of coin when I talk about a certain subject. I want the reader not just only see the one side that I might agree on but also another take on it to see if the reader might differ from from opinion. The purpose for that is to make the audience think a little for themselves on their own and make them wonder about the topic and what it really is. My decisions into making a draft for this essay wasn’t all the great.
The Writing Process: A Key to a Successful Essay Several writers have written articles about the writing process that college students tend to use. Some writers claim that college students do not write thoroughly. Through their writings, some authors advise students on how to write more efficiently. This is because most students are unaware of the various writing strategies and processes that can enhance their writing.
A thesis statement is the main argument of your essay. Your thesis statement should be an argument you feel you can substantiate with evidence from the literature you've read. If you can't do this, choose a different thesis statement. Note that an essay is not a book report. Therefore, your thesis statement should not be something inarguable, like: "Romeo and Juliet is a play about the struggles of two lovers fated to be apart.
Just like how the idiomatic expression “beauty is in the eyes of the beholder” is perceived, ‘moral values’, to a different person, has a distinct meaning. Moral values, more often than not, are defined according to the cultural beliefs. Each culture has its own sets of rules and beliefs to determine what is crucial, trivial, right, wrong, good and bad. For instance, it is vital for Chinese children to practice filial piety as it is an essential value of Chinese traditional culture (POŠKAITĖ, 2014); hence, living with parents, regardless of the marital status, is the right thing to do for it is good. On the contrary, Western children are not entitled to such obligation.
This time I have connected the paragraphs together. I had a better thesis statement. I had good topic sentences in each paragraph. The topic sentences were connected to the thesis. I had also used quotes better after using quotes I have cited them properly and explained the quote better.
There are many approaches to writing that, before taking this class, I had never even previously considered using. One such approach is the use of parallel structured sentences. Before the writing prompts in this class, I do not remember ever being taught about parallel structure or how to use it in an essay. Another new approach, that I have learned, is how to write the thesis statement before starting the rest of the paper. Normally when I would write a paper or essay, I would just start writing and see what would come to me.
Writing has always been an issue but yet interesting subject of mine. As hard as I try and write essays, and papers I just can’t get the hang of writing. But after taking this class, I did learn different writing technique and improved my writing proficiency, material body of formatting, and how to uncovering and properly use sources. Through class exams, essays, and a research paper, I was able to learn new writing skills. Although I have learned a variety of things, my writing still needs improvement.
