How softball being re-added to the Olympics would create a better world for women. These two combined are effective in the sense that she is creating passion and using her bias in an effective way. She is using her love for softball to tell them she isn’t the only one who cares this much, but that there are millions of others like her. She wants the audience to know how much this affects her and many others like her who are passionate about the sport. She also uses bias to convey the audience when she wraps up her ideas at the end.
You did a great job starting your conclusion with a summary of your main points and restated the thesis statement. In this way, this conclusion brings the audience's mind back to the overall purpose. You offered solid and concise claims to prove the author’s
Airline Johnson was a nurse and helped with other services similar to a nurse, in which she also picked cotton from the same field that Lonnie Johnson's grandfather owned. Lonnie Johnson’s family was not broke, but made a decent pay. Lonnie Johnson had no brothers, sisters, aunts, or uncles. In conclusion, I chose Lonnie Johnson as my person for this project because he was someone new. I wanted to use someone that I have never learned about before.
Thus, although Tami Lloyd’s lack of a college education limited her many things in her life she is an unsung hero due to her attitude of self-confidence, responsibility and ambition along with her eagerness to learn, and her ability to be caring and understanding of individuals while keeping a modest thought process.
This selflessness, nobility developed Claude Wheeler into becoming a hero. In a sense he became his own hero as well, and why do I say this? It is because in a humanistic and symbolic way he saved himself from the self-imposed and perhaps societal damnation of walking the earth
Kerri demonstrated determination by fighting off excruciating pain to achieve a goal, while, Tracy showed determination by working hard everyday in the most depressing and physically challenging jobs. Kerri showed selflessness by sacrificing her health for the good of her team, while Tracy showed selflessness by putting her patient's health before her own and risking everything to save others. Kerri Strug, world known, has accomplished a lot during her career and has become a role model for many young individuals. However, she is still very similar to my everyday hero Tracy. Tracy did not achieve worldwide fame or role model status, but she still showed determination and selflessness, fitting my definition of a hero.
His “sharply split opinions” signaled to the audience that his essay could go either way. By starting off with his primary research, he gained the reader’s attention enough that he or she would continue reading, despite their own opinions on the topic. His purpose for writing was driven by his numerous ordinary, but detrimental, experiences with college athletes as a student and as an educator. One sentence that reveals his purpose is, “It’s sad to see bright young athletes knowingly compromise their potential and settle for much less education than they deserve.”
Therefore, showing perseverance in such circumstances makes them heroes. Secondly, they exhibited passion for their education. Specifically, they demonstrated passion by continuing to get their education at a school in which they felt unwelcomed. Thus, having passion for education makes them amazing protagonists.
As has been noted in the previous paragraph Chris McCandless was a brave human being. Chris made an impact in life as well as on the trail. On page 3 it said that “Chris excelled academically and had been an elite athlete.” Although he didn’t run in college, he was the captain of his cross country team at Woodson High School in Virginia. While
I related to a bunch statements that you made in your essay. For example, I thought of something similar to your opening line- but I would never have used it in an essay. However, you did so brilliantly. You had a confident and optimistic tone throughout the essay, which was refreshing.
Did andrew carnegie’s philanthropy make him heroic. The thesis of the of the essay is Andrew Carnegie was a hero with evidence of significant achievement. For the counter thesis it is about how carnegie wasn’t a hero. In “document D” it shows that Carnegie was being a two face to the people he’s fond of and his workers. This evidence shows Carnegie is not a hero because he’s giving money and a library to the people of scotland and pittsburgh.
Peyton Manning I chose to write my paper on Peyton Manning. I picked Manning mainly in part to knowing much about him from watching sports and football growing up. I was able to find information I did not know by doing my research on him. Manning had more than just physical obstacles in his way to achieve success; there were a few psychological and physical things that hindered him.
(TOPIC SENTENCE) I have an adamant bond with some characters in the short stories because I relate to them in some sort, specifically, (THESIS I) Waverly Jong, since she is a (MAJOR A) committed and (MAJOR B) intellectual young girl. (RE-WORDING MA) Throughout Amy Tan’s “The Rules of the Game,” Waverly shows commitment, which is an exceptional quality she has, that stood out to me.
Deja Haynes Professor Bowles 8:00- 9:15 February 5, 2018 The American dream The United States of America, also known as the “Land of the free,” is one of the most distinctive countries in the world. A country made of people from many different races and ethnicities, it is the society which contains an interesting composite of cultures brought along by a diverse population. However, the ideal life for the citizens of the United States, the American dream, is a very contentious topic. The definition of the American dream can be determined and represented according to each person’s point of view.
My instructor Jennifer Jackson said this time “ Bravo! This is one of the strongest revisions I’ve seen yet.” This essay gave me so much confidence and made me feel I can actually write something interesting. Also, I sent my paper to The Writing Center, after I submitted my paper to my instructor to see any other mistakes I could have to improve my writing skills.
