My Writing As Positive Feedback

As far as positive feedback goes, I was told that my introduction and conclusion were interesting and well-developed. I was also told that I seemed to have put a lot of thought into the objects I chose to represent my life, and that I managed my body and facial expressions effectively during my speech. Additionally, my classmates thought I maintained eye contact with them, selected appropriate and descriptive words, and fully related my items to my overall theme of writing. Considering the constructive criticism I received, some of my classmates mentioned I repeated some sentences or phrases multiple times, and that I needed to work on the fluency of my words. A few pieces of feedback I was given matched the first part of my own self-critique. My classmates and I both mentioned fluency and fluidity, how my speech contained some vocal fillers, and how I didn’t transition well from point to point. Some things I didn’t consider were that I had too many hand gestures, or that I might have repeated some of the same lines. I also didn’t consider the quality of my word choice. I did best with the organization of my speech. I made sure I included a catchy introduction and conclusion, incorporated all four items that relate to me, and offered the explanations I was required to make for each of those. One

I also can see how I waved my hands around quite a bit. However, I disagree that I repeated the same line a lot. Once near the beginning of my speech, while explaining the light bulb, I mentioned in two consecutive sentences something to the effect that light bulbs “represent new ideas.” That was the only instance of repeating the same line, though, and the other times I repeated a phrase I did it either for clarification or in order to relate an item to a separate aspect of my life, so in those cases, the repetition was