Outline your essay as it currently stands
Introduction: What’s the point of surrounding oneself with materialistic items if you can’t even enjoy it because you must work so much just to afford it.
State your thesis: Understanding what it means to become financially stable, and taking the careful precautions that lead up to living within your means. Money does not buy happiness, and why it’s great to know at a young age.
Body paragraph 1:
State your topic sentence: The repercussions of being a teenager with a brand new credit card.
Summarize your evidence/examples:
•Establishing a high amount of debt
•Understanding between needs and wants
•Spending money on items that become obsolete and considered junk
Body
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•Establishing myself into a career instead of being at a job
•Setting higher goals due to increase of wage and less anxiety
Conclusion
Reinstate my thesis statement starting with a transition words from my body paragraphs. Stating my main topic and coming to a subtle ending.
Transition word:
•First, second and third
•First and foremost, meanwhile, therefore
•In the beginning, in a instance, furthermore
How purpose is reemphasized:
•Locate two gaps in the outline where you need to make connections more clea See “Is the Paper Coherent?” in Chapter 9, Section 2 of your textbook.
1.I will establish a more in depth transition between my body paragraphs.
2.I will create better sentence