The author has good attention getter and draw’s the reader to the paper. The paragraph is good and one way I would suggest one way of making it more effective by, using quotation or great words of a well-known author. Next, the middle paragraph has a good amount information and key points and the author has done really good job of summarizing the essay in the paragraph. The middle is effective as it is, but my suggestion would be, to include a strong statics about the students who is trapped in the high debt. This will add the effectiveness of the paragraph. The author has carefully stated the thesis statement in the last of the paragraph as shown in the guide lines of the education paper. Next come the problem paragraph, where the author has