Overall, I have made the paper to focus more on myself. For instance, I edited the thesis statement so that it represent my point of view about the social class instead of what other people think. Such as I used the word me, I, and I am throughout the thesis instead of people. By doing so, make more sense when connected to the third paragraph, which talks about my goals, ambition, what I hold dear, and the reason I choose Thomas. Plus, I added more information to the conclusion so that it's more about me. Like, introduced the first sentence by talking about how I have experienced the differences of social class when I was younger. In addition, I deleted sentence eleventh and sixteenth in the fourth paragraph because paragraph four was too