During the timed wright for my Kite Runner essay I made many mistakes; however, I did things well as well. A lot of my sentences were simple or complex. There were an even number of each type of sentences; unfortunately each type of sentences were were clumped together. All of my simple sentences tended to be in the first body paragraph and the second paragraph had the complex sentences. One thing I definitely need focus on in the future is spread them out more. Another one of the biggest problems, that I have had for a while, is misspelled words. This can be especially difficult for me during a timed write. I often feel as though there is not enough time to go back and make sure all words are spelled correctly; therefore, it is necessary to be able to spell words correctly the first time around. …show more content…
One of the things that the peer feedback discussed was the amount of well written support was present for each of my examples. However, some said they would have liked to see more examples for each point. Because my outline was less of an sentence by sentence layout of what I wanted to write, and just covered the points I wanted to hit my word choice was a bit difficult. Along with misspelled words, some words seemed to have no presuppose in the essay, and made no sense in the sentence. These unneeded words made the essay sound more vacant and underdeveloped. Picking a broad topic of discrimination also lead, to my essay be more confusing as I tried to explain how I viewed discrimination. It did not help that I was not as motivated to right about discrimination as I could have