Marc, Overall your paper is informative in nature and provides some strong information on the history of tanks in warfare. You did a great job pointing out that the Germans used new tactics during the blitzkrieg compared to the Allies. You should have developed this with more detail to describe the Germans tactics. Explain the way tanks were used to “punch” a hole in weaker defenses while avoiding stronger defensive positions. Thus, quickly overrunning an Allies position allowing the Germans tanks and forces access behind the Allis front line and encircling the stronger positions. Citing examples in the tactics would make your paper stronger in the future. The paper provides good support for your thesis in the use of tanks in warfare during battles in North Africa during World War II. The citing of Operation Zitadelle adds to the strength of your thesis. …show more content…
This would help with some of the arears that are wordy and help the papers flow. An example is in your thesis statement that states “While the tank started as a pipe dream and then became little more than a novelty, it eventually evolved into what it was meant to be and still continues to evolve in this modern day’s ever-changing battlefield as well as in the minds of people.” Reorganizing sentence structure would lead to a stronger paper. Maybe the thesis statement could read; The armoured tank first developed from an idea into a powerful weapon used in warfare, but do to advancing technologies it’s use has become limited in today’s ever changing battlefield. Proofing read and sentence structure would aid in the strength of your