Thesis Statement Analysis

I received a 23/35 on my final essay, which is making me nervous since was aiming for a paper that achieves good grade. Also, comparing it to marks that I have gotten in this class which are wonderful, is making me anxious. I am writing to let you know that, in my opinion I feel that I should deserve a higher mark on my essay. This is because my paper links to the course theme from the textbook. My paper has a thesis statement of what the paper will argue and I have a road map on what my paper will argue. Also, I do have an argument with evidence from the sources. My thesis statement was, how China remained communist with an open market approach. It even contains the process of the order of the arguments that deals with my thesis statement.

My body paragraphs are well broken down into distinct categories which links back to my thesis. To make it more understandable, I even define the difference between communism and capitalism near the beginning of my paper. Furthermore, I also mentioned how my paper will the benefit to and open market. Thus, in that section I argued the difference between Zedong and Xiaoping, the success and struggle for their approaches. Alongside, how and why Xiaoping was the stronger reason for the transition of China. Hence, with the argument placed are counter arguments that allow for deeper understanding of why China taken the approach to move towards an open market economy. For example, in my paper I mention how opening up the market allows silk to create wealth by export causing infant industry to strive towards success and the increase of GDP to 9.8%. My paper has proper citation format and I have more than 10 sources to prove why China and how China has moved towards an open market economy. In my conclusion paragraph, tied the paper together to sum up the thesis and the body paragraph. I also mentioned the implication, which was the argument to decide which leader was the correct one to open the market while remaining a communist