Thesis Statement For Cinderella

After submitting the RA first full draft, you commented on how I could improvise it. One of the comments read, “A good way to stay organized is to start with a key sentence that states your own assertion clearly. Then back it up with evidence and arguments from primary and secondary texts that are all relevant to your key sentence. Try not to start paragraphs with quotes.”
A lot of my paragraphs, as a matter of fact, did begin with quotes and I realized that it was not the right way so I went about trying to start them with a thesis statement for that paragraph. For example, this paragraph provides a “key” statement which tells the readers what the paragraph is going to be composed of-

“Cinderella for sure is a classic, but peeling off each layer successively reveals key issues with gender roles and stereotypes. Some ideas seem to fit only when looked through the lenses of the olden times, but some issue on the other hand, still seem profoundly prevalent in current

So, in the same way, I went about changing each paragraph. For example, I improvised this paragraph

“In the Pink Flower, there is a description which reflects the overwhelming importance of beauty- “so beautiful that no painter could ever have made her look more beautiful” (Grimm and Grimm, 286) Similar importance can be seen in The Goose Girl at the spring- “so beautiful that the entire world considered her a miracle” (Grimm and Grimm, 566) Some have broken through the chains of gender role and stereotypes in today’s world. But some issues are still struggling to break through. ….” (Apurva Jakhanwal, RA First Full Draft)

by providing a thesis statement which helped me transition from the previous paragraph and provides a statement for the current paragraph to help the readers know what is going to follow. I then backed up my thesis statement by providing