Obesity is the problems in the world. Obesity is the main cause of heart problems, hyperbaton, high blood pressure, etc. Yes, this draft adhere to the proposal guidelines. The writer include a well-defined thesis statement with bold print. Actually, about thesis statement I did not know what to write. I tried to figure out in the book but I did not found. Me too I write it but I did not know that is correct or wrong. However, Clare you highlighted with bold to the topic sentences, topic sentence should not need to highlight. Almost body paragraph align with the thesis statements. In the proposal guidelines, it written that we should put page number, but Clare you miss page number too. Clare you have some spelling mistakes, commas, and sentence