5.10 A Powerful Product Worksheet
Revise and edit your argument. Then paste your entire final draft in the space below. (You should have 4 paragraphs: Introduction, 2 body paragraphs, and conclusion. Your works cited page should also be included)
Who doesn’t love to play sports in college? Sports are fun, keep your body in shape, and sometimes can keep you financially stable. Some people think that college athletes should get payed for playing. Others think athletes should not be paid. College athletes deserve to be paid for playing on the school teams. Athletes should be paid because they advertise the schools. Some schools make more money but the students do not see any of the profits. College athletes should be paid also because they might need to support their families and themselves. Most college students have a part time job to support themselves, if an athlete is playing sports and going to class, they do not have enough time to get a job. However, there is a belief that college athletes do not need the money because they are still under their parents care financially.
There is people who think the players should not be paid for playing because the athletes have enough financial stability. Young athletes are usually naive and would easily be influenced by drugs and alcohol or maybe even steroids. As reported by
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I consulted my older cousin to help me revise the essay. I mostly corrected the sentence structure and punctuation. In my first draft, I had repeated many of the words, but I fixed that in my final draft. These corrections made my debate have more quality and sound more sophisticated. This debate became more informative once I corrected the grammar. For the second submission of this homework, I corrected the citations in the text and added the Works Cited page that was missing the first time. I also found more synonyms for words that were too common or repeated and corrected some of the