Revision Essays

assignment was given we were settled into the school year. With this being said, juggling school work, a job, and this class, I did not have any time for this paper. My Investigative Report did not meet the page length, audience identification, nor revision. I did not show any improvement in this assignment and once again received a 74 just like my profile. I realized at that moment I wasn’t fixing my issue and needed to change my act if I wanted to do this class. Luckily, I had the opportunity to rewrite

improvements that needed to be made to my paper to ensure a higher mark. By looking at the comments made by my TA, referring to the Writing History book for guidance and using my own knowledge, I was able to correct my mistakes. The first step I took in my revision process was to read all the comments and changes that he made. This helped me understand the quality of my paper and how much I needed to edit. The first point that my TA mentioned that needed some improvement was the structure of my thesis statement

Introduction News images shape our culture in an extremely profound way. Photojournalism is a particular form of journalism that documents images in order to tell a news story. Like any other form of journalism, photojournalism has to follow a set of guided rules. But is no longer just ‘news image’. The photojournalist’s role in the earlier days of newspaper journalism was relatively straightforward – capturing a moment in time – a piece of reality. Ready to publish the truth to the public. These

Revision In revising this paper, I took into consideration both deep-level and surface-level revisions. I focused on improving the analysis of my paper by first reading through the essay and thinking over the comments made on both the essay and the grading rubric. From these comments, I realized that I needed to strengthen both my introduction and my conclusion. To achieve this, I reworded the introduction and strengthened my thesis statement to ensure that it was precise and focused on my topic

Listening is a crucial part in communication that allows us to become more effective and productive in our personal lives and also in a professional setting like in school. As a student at UC Davis, listening is essential in order to obtain success in my classes as I must listen to my professor’s lectures in order to comprehend the class material. By examining 4 listening practices and putting them into action helped me become a better listener during lectures and become more efficient and productive

Revisions in the Declaration of Independence Like most papers, documents, and essays, the Declaration of Independence had a first draft before it was published the way we now know it. Rather than having a teacher or a peer edit it, however, it was done so by a whole Congress of people. Very few parts of the document remained untouched, and virtually every well-known phrase from the Declaration was edited in some form from its original version. However, the allowing of it to be edited proved crucial

Revision Statement: I first confirmed that my essay title is strong and engaging, so that my readers will be immediately interested. I made sure that my essay title was an engaging question such as: “Can the Act of Child Labor be Stopped?“ This question will cause my readers to be curios of the answer, resulting them to begin reading my essay. I confirmed that my essay was written with critical thinking and in-depth sentences so that my Child Labor topic is fully analyzed from every perspective

Jill Rocquin Bruce Alford March 25, 2015 Essay 2 Revision Parents should find Alternatives to Physical Punishment It is never all right to hit a child Imagine that instead of being spoken to in a mature fashion, adults were disciplined physically. If one adult were to hit another adult the situation could be considered assault and then that person could possibly spend a night in jail. So why do adults hit children in order to teach them a lesson? It is considered wrong by most people to hit another

Taha 1P5 Revisions The things we do matter There are many poems with many meanings but among all these meanings and all these poems the best one is “A Creed” by Edwin Markham. The message shown in the poem is no matter where you’re from or how different you may be; it’s the good things we do in life that matter. This is a one of a kind message that is prominent amongst all other poems. To give this message Markham uses quatrains, rhymes and specific word choice. The way Markham uses all

Language Came Revision The author introduce us to Helen Keller condition where she can neither see nor hear. Deprived of the two ability Keller know nothing about language. The limitation caused by her acquired condition at a tender age leaves her in a dark world that she desire to escape from. The escape is made possible by her teacher Suillivan who teach her to communicate and think through touch. The significance of language as a tool that connect ideas, memory, thought and emotions elevate the

victorious. The rough draft contains minor revisions with great impacts. As the revisions are made, there is a greater message that lay behind the document which reveals a persevering of identity. Identity, in this context, representing the United States of America as a nation that holds life and liberty to the highest extent. The original document of the United States of America says just as much as the official in comparison because its omissions and revisions reveal the psyche of the leaders. Thomas

A large part of my revision process – which Meg was immensely helpful in – was developing a strong ‘so what,’ part of my thesis. Meg’s comments on her letter and in person helped me realize that even though I could not see it, the argument I was trying to make was already present in my paper. In our meeting we talked about a couple of different paths my argument could take and Meg helped me narrow down all of the different lines of thought I had to make a singular argument. Meg and I also discussed

Kukua Duodu ENL 102 Professor Lori Beth De Hertogh 21 April 2016 Revision Memo Since my last draft I have edited my research question. I decided to narrow my subject to focus on two types of communities and their creations. Changing my research question from all communities to online communities and communities based on powerful movements. I have added three more sources into my contribution essay. One is about a powerful movement and two about the effectiveness of online communities. For my primary

with Mr. Chapman, I acquired many new techniques, such as the use of voice leading. Voice leading is the notion that notes and voices will naturally move towards their closet note, instead of jumping randomly to different notes (Gray, Composition Revision and New Ideas). This was a major problem I encountered in my composition, as the transitions I wrote were abrupt and appeared to fragment the piece into several sections instead of one coherent composition. Through the use of voice leading, I learned

quality improvement initiatives. The health information manager (HIM) and Standards Branch at the Ministry of Health were tasked to develop a project of introducing the use of International Classification of Diseases and Health Related Problems Tenth Revision, Canada (ICD-10-CA) and Systematized Nomenclature of Medicine

Lion, an autobiography previously published as ‘Long Way Home’ by Saroo Brierley, explores the ongoing quest in search for his home and family among the immensity of India. It presents a challenge that serves as an open window for understanding his character. Through Saroo’s determination, emotional trouble and relentless chasing of belonging, Saroo immerses himself through difficult questions of self identity. Saroo’s narrative of his journey unpacks three main themes of challenges, the lack of

Draft revisions to the 2008 standards were completed by the ISLLC Standards Committee in 2014. The updated version, referred to as the Professional Standards for Educational Leaders (PSEL), reflects years of research, as well as, best practices and knowledge from experienced school leaders and district-level practitioners. The new standards challenge ‘business as usual’ as it reshapes school policy, leadership programs, and evaluations. More precisely, the standards place a higher level of expectation

Personal Narrative Essay Revision “It’s a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step onto the road, and if you don’t keep your feet, there’s no knowing where you might be swept off to.” - J.R.R. Tolkien In J.R.R. Tolkien’s, The Fellowship of the Ring, the quote above is given by Gandalf to Frodo. In the context of the story, the quote relates to Frodo leaving the shire in order to bring the ring to Mordor. In regards to this essay, however, this quote relates to my aspirations as a

My revision process is better then expected. The advice you have given me for the material has helped me tremendously. I hope that the revisions I have turned in will show the changes that helped me progress on the writing material. I look at papers completely different now for reviewing any type of paper given. I always look for the Pathos, Ethos and Logos in papers or actually anything I read for that matter. My class participation I think is more than fair. Every class I try and communicate

Reflection On Work Revision Dear Professor Jolie, In Nancy Sommers’ article, “Revision Strategies of Student writer”, Sommers did a few examining on students’ revision writing in order to see how does revision works in students’ writing process. As regarding the article, Sommers found out many students believe that text revision is basically re-wording their essay, which is like Sommers said, “The student place a symbolic importance on their selection and rejection of words as the determiners of